This was a scene that worked when Femitokon ran in serial episodes at Patreon. We’d met Pitana Dag in Episode One and this felt like a natural progression to ending the first two arcs; unfortunately, it had no place in the novel structure of Tactical Pursuits as its narrative involved Eppis, Koba, Sofita, Ilo and…
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Deleted Scene: Episode Six
When Eppis learns of Ilo’s death, a tiny flashback to their romantic collusion appears; as mentioned by Sofita in Episode 4, and then alluded within Ilo’s thoughts in her debut chapter. Flashbacks inside dialogue-heavy scenes is a no-no, and Ilo’s past narrative grew long. There was no reason to include it the scene and doing…
Deleted Scene: Episode One
I wrote this scene into the first draft before Ziw Balru appeared in the second draft review. After Balru departs, Sofita receives a mission assignment from Pitana Dag while lounging at the pool. The pair of hizaki are watched closely by three ‘breeders’ (a subak, a zaxir, and their zaxir daughter, Hako.) After Hako approaches…