Another flashback scene cut for flow – how Ilo really met Velto. Forgive any errors for this scene was excised and never made it past the first draft phase. =_=; Last year, Ilo Cux was named Prime Citizen of Ramaxia. Tuzaxi Hide Care presented her with a contract to be the face of…
Tag: editing
Deleted Scene: Episode Eight
This was a scene that worked when Femitokon ran in serial episodes at Patreon. We’d met Pitana Dag in Episode One and this felt like a natural progression to ending the first two arcs; unfortunately, it had no place in the novel structure of Tactical Pursuits as its narrative involved Eppis, Koba, Sofita, Ilo and…
Deleted Scene: Episode Six
When Eppis learns of Ilo’s death, a tiny flashback to their romantic collusion appears; as mentioned by Sofita in Episode 4, and then alluded within Ilo’s thoughts in her debut chapter. Flashbacks inside dialogue-heavy scenes is a no-no, and Ilo’s past narrative grew long. There was no reason to include it the scene and doing…