This was a scene that worked when Femitokon ran in serial episodes at Patreon. We’d met Pitana Dag in Episode One and this felt like a natural progression to ending the first two arcs; unfortunately, it had no place in the novel structure of Tactical Pursuits as its narrative involved Eppis, Koba, Sofita, Ilo and…
Tag: deleted scenes
Deleted Scenes: Episode Seven
This was a flashback to Ilo’s second meeting with Velto – the one alluded to in Episode One that Ilo recalls as their first meeting. It didn’t fit into Episode Seven like I hoped and thus didn’t make it to the second draft. (Warning: First Draft – not as polished as I would like…) Deleted…
Deleted Scene: Episode Six
When Eppis learns of Ilo’s death, a tiny flashback to their romantic collusion appears; as mentioned by Sofita in Episode 4, and then alluded within Ilo’s thoughts in her debut chapter. Flashbacks inside dialogue-heavy scenes is a no-no, and Ilo’s past narrative grew long. There was no reason to include it the scene and doing…