When Eppis learns of Ilo’s death, a tiny flashback to their romantic collusion appears; as mentioned by Sofita in Episode 4, and then alluded within Ilo’s thoughts in her debut chapter. Flashbacks inside dialogue-heavy scenes is a no-no, and Ilo’s past narrative grew long. There was no reason to include it the scene and doing…
Category: DELETED SCENES
Deleted Scene: Episode Five
Anticipating ascension, Eppis Banto moves to protect her spouse, Ozbi, by forcing her other spouses into a bond break. She plans to do this by claiming huzkutx (a Femarctic form of impotence) and this requires a visit to a Genbluz. The purpose of the scene is two-fold: detail how sexual therapy works; show how intricate…
Deleted Scene: Episode One
I wrote this scene into the first draft before Ziw Balru appeared in the second draft review. After Balru departs, Sofita receives a mission assignment from Pitana Dag while lounging at the pool. The pair of hizaki are watched closely by three ‘breeders’ (a subak, a zaxir, and their zaxir daughter, Hako.) After Hako approaches…